The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/08
Oooh, quite the test here for this sister! I liked the prayers that each character sent up in turn, but it was a tad confusing with the point of views shifting, some extra spacing or so, will help to separate them next time.

Otherwise, I loved the ending of this, especially with the "stop and go"
05/09/08
Interesting encounter and how such a seemingly childish game broke the ice with your biological brother. I did however have to read through it a couple of times to make sure I kept the characters and storyline straight. Thanks for sharing!