The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/08
Awww! This is so sweet! I liked this poem to a big brother from his younger sister. Great job, especially liked the story with how the doctors couldn't find any burns. That's neat.

I only have one little typo-was it "Have" instead of "Of" in this line? : It must of annoyed you, to a frown

Otherwise, this is really great and heartfelt! ^_^
05/12/08
This is a really great tribute to your brother, nicely done.

You might consider getting a buddy to help you with some punctuation problems.

I could really feel the story of your love for your brother that you were telling, and of how much you looked up to him.
This is a nice tribute to your brother. See some punctuation and spacing issues but heartwarming to read and see how he saved your life too.