The Official Writing Challenge
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So sad, those words that I think we all can identify with. If only I knew...thank you for this, it is a reminder to take the extra moment to see to make sure that this time, we 'know'. Good job. ^_^
A moving poem. I like the way you end your poem. Great!
Excellent use of repetition of a too-familiar feeling after a loved one passes on. I like the internal structure of the poem--except you break it in one place where you say you could rejoice if you knew she was with God. Don't get me wrong--I think the lines are poignant but they do not quite fit the rest of the pattern of what you could have or would have done for your mom when she was alive. Maybe that stanza deserves to become its own poem.