The Official Writing Challenge
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I thought this was really well written. I like how you described his emotions from his desire to be a father to becoming a father. The awe you described when he first saw his daughter is touching.
04/17/08
The father's heart that engaged when he saw his child is very well described in this story. Love the way you portrayed the moment he finally feels connected to his baby girl.
04/20/08
Sweet story!
04/20/08
Such a lovely portait painted by the soon Father-to-be; it was so touching, and it's true...A picture IS worth a thousand words, and thanks for sharing this delightful picture with us! I enjoyed a tug at my heart when "dad" heard his new name...(just a little word on punctuation and sentence structure) otherwise a very nice entry!
04/20/08
Oops! "work", not word. Sorry. Just a few comma's here and there to break up the longer sentences.
You made me cry when you connected and the excitement in you was expressed very gently and efficently. Good writing.