The Official Writing Challenge
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The past can lead us to make decisions that are not always the right ones; so glad God helped to soften your heart and to lead you make peace with those feelings.
Nice job with framing the esay with the Hallmark card bits.

Work a bit on "showing, not telling." You might consider choosing just one incident and expanding on it, so that you can develop your character (and your father's) more thoroughly.
Some mechanical work in posing the essay will help. Work on the descriptions, and you will go far with your writing.