The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
There are so many pivotal moments in a son's life where his parents can help or hurt just by their actions. Your story reflects one of those moments where recrimination and harsh words just won't help anyone. I like the loving way this dad cried with his son, and then got on with the job of loving his son, even in a disappointing moment. Good story!
04/18/08
Very well done, and the characters are well-written.

I think you could tighten up your writing a bit, though. For example, you have paralyzed, I couldn't move. Watch for redundancies like this, and then you'll have even more words to develop your characters.
A real model of love and grace on the father's part. What an example he has set for his son. Well done.
04/24/08
Congratulations on your Highly Commended. This is really good--a nice take on the topic.
04/25/08
HI Amanda: Amazing story and congratulations. This is a teary one. Well written and good luck in the future. Look forward to reading another story.
05/03/08
Very touching and emotional. I love this. Keep writing.