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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: A Tale of Two Grannies
By Lyn Churchyard
04/09/08


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“Grandma, tell me about Daddy when he was a boy and ran away with the circus.”

“I tell you that story every time you come to stay with me.”

“Pleeeease Grandma; it’s such a good story.”

Anna’s grandmother laughed and sat on the seat by the window overlooking the park, while Anna leapt onto her grandmother’s bed ready for the story she already knew so well, but never tired of hearing.

“It was about 1943, and the circus was in town. Your father and his friend Oscar had played hooky from school–not for the first time I might add–and had gone down to the river where the circus had set up camp.”

Anna’s eyes took on a faraway look as her grandmother continued.

“Your Daddy and his friend told the owner they wanted to join the circus. Now, the circus owner was no fool, and he put the boys to work cleaning up after the animals. Oh, it was hard work, and more than once, they received a drenching from the elephants that were enjoying a soak in the river.

“By the second day, your grandpa wanted to know where your Daddy was.”

“What did you tell him?” Anna whispered. “Was Grandpa mad at them?”

Anna’s grandmother leant forward and kissed her. “You know as well as I do what happened.”

“Oh, Grandma, it’s so much better when you tell the story. It’s like it’s happening right now.”

Her grandmother chuckled. “Well, fortunately, your grandpa had to go to the city about a job and was away for three days. But when he got home, he started to get suspicious and soon guessed where your daddy was. He was as mad as a wet hen, but all I wanted was for your daddy to come home. I was so worried about him, because by this time, the circus had left town.”

“It must have been really exciting being with the circus.” Anna laughed.

“Well, you daddy and his friend worked hard from sunup to sunset for five days, and at the end of each day, they were exhausted and would fall asleep under one of the caravans. Then on the sixth day, they woke up to find themselves in an empty field. The circus had packed up and left before daybreak. Your daddy and his friend were miles and miles from home with no money and no food.”

“I love this part Grandma,” whispered Anna.

“Oh yes, this is when your daddy realised that God was looking after them because He sent someone to help them.”

“And the man who gave them a ride in his truck said he didn’t know why he went down that road because he never uses it.” Said Anna grinning in delight.

Anna’s grandmother nodded. “Yes, but when they got back home, your daddy still got into trouble from your grandfather, and he found it very difficult to sit down for a couple of days. But Anna, always remember, even though God sent help, your daddy still had to accept the consequences for his disobedience.”

Anna nodded and tried to stifle a yawn. Lying in the sun on her grandmother’s bed always made her sleepy and it wasn’t long before her eyes closed, and she drifted off to sleep.

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“Grandma! I’m here Grandma, I’m here!” Lucy ran into the sitting room where her grandmother sat on the sofa reading her Bible.

Her grandmother’s eyes lit up; “Well now my Lucy lamb, it’s so good to see you!” she said enveloping her granddaughter in a hug.

A woman who could only have been Lucy’s mother, smiled at the sight of grandmother and granddaughter together. “Now are you sure you can cope with her for three days Mum?”

“Oh absolutely! I’ve been looking forward to this. You and Mark just go and have a nice relaxing break.”

“All right, thanks Mum.” She kissed them both and waved as she headed out the door.

“Just think Grandma Anna; we have three whole days together.”

“Oh I know my little lamb. We are going to have so much fun!”

“Can we bake an apple pie together?”

“We’ll bake an apple pie AND mulberry pie.”

Lucy leant against her grandmother contentedly. “Grandma Anna, do you know any good stories?”

Her grandmother smiled. “Have I ever told you the story of when your great grandpa was a boy and ran away with the circus?”

Lucy sat wide-eyed as her grandmother began...


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Sara Harricharan 04/10/08
Ohhh, what a neat story! My word for this would be 'charming'! I like the title and especially how the ending turned out. It was fun to see how that particular story was being 'handed' down. (and funny to hear about running away to join the circus!) Great job! ^_^
Marsha Landers04/11/08
The title is an attention getter. Of course, I was thinking it would be maternal and paternal grandmothers that a child was talking about. A pleasant turn to see the child as the second grannie. I enjoyed it a lot!Good idea, good story.
Holly Westefeld04/11/08
I love the circle you used in this delightful story.
Joshua Janoski04/12/08
I loved how the granddaughter ended up telling the same story that she loved so much to her own grandchildren.

Sometimes people tell me that I should join the circus because I'm a big clown. Hmmm...I think I'll pass since I really don't want to get stuck cleaning up after the animals (though getting drenched by the elephants might be fun).

A fun story, that I enjoyed very much.
Peter Stone04/13/08
How wonderful to see a story being handed down through the generations like that. Cute to hear how the circus handled the boys - by disappearing while they were asleep.
jodie banner04/13/08
What a wonderful way to show how stories pass from generation to generation. I liked how the first Grandma taught about God while passing down her history.
Chely Roach04/13/08
This was a wonderful, very well written story. Great job!
Karen Wilber 04/13/08
This is delightful and fun. I love how you strung us along with Anna as she encouraged her grandma to retell the familiar story. Then the ending...where she tells her own granddaughter...that was great. Love how it circles back around; that was effective.
Marlene Austin04/13/08
Precious, Lynne. Great tie-in for two seemingly unrelated stories. Characters and actions were very real. Great descriptive story-telling. :)
Sharlyn Guthrie04/13/08
Great family atories have a life of their own. I love the way you illustrated this. Nice job!
Jan Ackerson 04/14/08
Just chock-full of charm and personality.
Debbie Wistrom04/14/08
A wonderful lighthearted entry that changed my mood. Creative and masterful, keep writing.
Joy Faire Stewart04/15/08
I enjoyed the story telling within the story. This is delightful. Great job on topic!
Loren T. Lowery04/16/08
Truly, a family of gifted story tellers. I really enjoyed this and could just picture myself, beggin to hear the story again and again.
Tim Pickl04/16/08
Wonderfully written story-- hope this propels you to Level 2 (Intermediate)!
Mandy White04/16/08
I loved this, Lynne. Stories passed down through generations are priceless!