The Official Writing Challenge
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04/10/08
I think you've successfully summed up everything that 'makes' a grandparent! It makes me want to go hug my Grandmother!
I only have one note to point out, for the line
"our daughter gave us a plague for Christmas"

I think you meant 'plaque' as in something to hang on the wall, right? ^_^

This was really good, thanks for sharing! ^_^
04/10/08
Sounds like your grandchildren are wonderful blessings--how fortunate you are!

There were some places where you made "grandparents" into two words, and a few times where you slipped into 2nd person, where 1st would be more effective.

I like the use of "Universe" in the title--nice concept.
04/12/08
I agree that you summed up being a grandparent very nicely in this piece. It makes me look forward to the day when I have children and then they have children of their own. I'm in no rush though. :)

The only problem I saw that was already pointed out was the word "plague" needs to be "plaque." Also, some whitespace would help the reader be able to follow this better.

Good job with this one. I look forward to reading future entries from you.
04/18/08
Congratulations, Randy, on placing 12th in your level with this piece. Great work!