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04/10/08
I love the tone of this! Sweet and playful with a little emotion mixed in. Enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!
04/10/08
What precious memories to have! I really liked how you portrayed the daughter-the humor is there in that last few lines where she shouts "score!" That last line was my favorite though-well done! ^_^
04/10/08
I love the touch of humor here, with the "Score!" and the family lore.

A few things: the movie is "Cat Ballou", and the sentence ending "...my brother and I" should be "...my brother and me."

The dialogue is well-done in your story, and takes it up a notch in quality.
I enjoyed this warm story of memories and tradition, and loved the ending.
I wish I had known of these "slower" times. They sound wonderful. I really liked the tone of this piece, and how you mixed several different emotions into it.

There were a few small typos, but those are easily corrected, and they didn't detract from the story.

Great writing. I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the weeks to come.
What wonderful memories. This is sweet and touching, and the ending make me chuckle. Nicely done.
04/16/08
Your story touched my heart--memories of a slower time, indeed. Thank you for sharing.