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04/10/08
This is a very sweet piece. Very good job.
Laury
Your article really makes me long for grandparenthood. great job!
04/10/08
What a sweet sentiment! Very nice. You've gotten the events out of order in the 2nd paragraph: she sees the twin blue eyes, and then in the next sentence the life is still growing inside her. oops! I love the last line. Made me go "aawww" :) Great job on this topic!
04/10/08
A lovely story of a tradition that I've been through and you captured some of the myriad feelings that a prospective grandmother might feel.
"Over the years as they watched that baby grow into a toddler and mature into a teenager, she found it to be like watching a piece of her heart outside of her body."

I really liked the second part of that sentence. I can only imagine what it would be like to be a parent or grandparent and see part of you walking around. You described that well.

This piece was short but effective. I enjoyed it very much. I think you have a gift of words, and I look forward to seeing more of your writing. :)
Oh what a sweet story. I remember well the feeling of holding my firstborn and my first grandchild. There is nothing like either experience.

LOL just when a mother thinks her work is done, she becomes a grandmother.

Well done!
I think this story is beautifully written. I love the word pictures you paint.