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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: Pass the Values, Please
By Beckie Stewart
04/05/08


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“Now boarding passengers for flight 56 to Dallas,” the woman’s voice announced over the intercom. “Those needing assistance, those with small children, and unescorted children will board first.”

The young teenage boy quickly whirled around and hugged the woman next to him. As the light reflected off her face, a glimpse of water glistened from her eyes. The boy was too excited to take notice to his mother’s welling tears as he kissed her cheek and darted toward the gate to board the plane.

The check-in clerk glanced at his ticket and motioned to a stewardess standing near by. The young stewardess was wearing a dark blue dress suit and had eyes as blue as the sky.

“Please escort this boy to his seat,” the clerk curtly said.

As Joe followed the suited woman with long brown silky hair, he mumbled under his breath that he didn’t need any help. He disliked the implication that he was some little kid. He was almost fourteen and was flying to spend the summer working for his granddaddy. With this incident aside, the flight from Portland, Oregon, to Dallas, Texas, went without a hitch. Joe enjoyed the free drinks, sandwich and cookies as well as the fact that the he had a window seat and no one sitting next to him. As the flight began to wind down, he pulled a piece of gum from his backpack as his ears began to feel like he had been underwater too long. Joe watched out the window to see if he recognized any of the landscape as they descended into the Dallas area.

Joe could barely contain his excitement as he rushed off the plane into the waiting outstretched arms of his grandparents.

“Did you enjoy your flight,” Grammy asked as she put her arms around his shoulders.

“It was good. I almost finished my entire book.”

“What are you reading, “ Granddaddy inquired in a deep voice that echoed for blocks.

“The Sackett Brothers.”

“Ah, yes, a good Louis L’Amour book. I haven’t read that one yet. Would love to read it when you’re done,” Granddaddy said.

“Yes, sir.”

“So, tell me how the family is doing,” Grammy asked as they traveled toward home. Joe recounted to his grandparents what the family had been doing since grandparent’s visit at Easter. The ride also included instructions from Granddaddy as to what he was going to expect of Joe on his upcoming job.
“If you expect to get paid, then you need to work hard,” he told Joe. “I’ve no use for lazy workers and will not pay anyone for doing nothing.”

“Yes, sir,” Joe obediently said. He knew his Granddaddy meant every word.

Digging irrigation ditches was not an easy job at all, especially in the Texas sun and arid heat. Granddaddy made sure Joe was up and ready to leave the house every day by seven sharp. They stopped for occasional drinks and lunch. If Granddaddy went off and returned to find Joe and his workers talking without digging, in a bellowing voice to be heard by all within fifty feet, Granddaddy sternly said, “Joe, stop dallying around and talking. Get to work. We need this job done today.” As long as the shovel was hitting the ground in a consistent basis, talking was tolerated.

Joe was always relieved when they would finally arrive back to his grandparent’s air conditioned home, and one of Grammy’s home cooked meals that inevitably included some delicious dessert that she had baked that day. Exhausted from a long day of work, Joe anticipated the quiet and relaxing evenings spent sitting in the living room with his grandparents.

“Joe, did you return the twenty dollars you borrowed from your grandmother last week,” Granddaddy inquired.

“Not yet, sir.”

“Well you got paid today, boy. You give her back what is hers now, before you go spending it all.”

“Yes, sir,” Joe sheepishly answered as he retrieved the money and gave it to his Grammy.

The years have come and gone since that first summer, and the following summers that Joe would spend with his grandparents. They are gone now, but the lessons they taught have not died. When Joe sets his mind to some task, it will be accomplished. Joe has provided well for his family and knows the value of each dollar he saves and spends. He has strived to owe no man anything, but love the way his grandparents loved him.


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Laury Hubrich 04/10/08
This is a very nice tribute to your husband and his grandfather. Very nice writing. What an awesome thing to do, to put your husband's memory in writing.
Laury
Catrina Bradley 04/10/08
Excellent writing! I especially like "eyes as blue as the sky." and "a deep voice that echoed for blocks." Great descriptions. I noticed a couple places where you need a question mark in your dialog instead of a comma - minor problem. Good job on the topic!
Lollie Hofer04/10/08
There are so many stories to read...where to begin? Great choice for a title, it helped lure me in. And you didn't disappoint either. Your story was true to the title. Enjoyed it tremendously. What an awesome tribute to some incredible people.
Donna Emery04/10/08
A very good tribute to the grandparents' work ethic and how this oving couple helped to recreate this work ethic in the young man.
Judy Doyle 04/10/08
Very good. I like the description of Joe's experience on the plane. I could see Joe enjoying the drinks and food. As you described his reaction to being seated, I pictured my brother just that way. Good job, Beckie. Joe's granddaddy did a good job teaching important values.
Norma-Anne Hough 04/11/08
Nice story.I enjoyed reading it. Wonderful to have those memories which he so obviously shared with you.
Joshua Janoski04/11/08
My grandfather was a VERY hard worker, and he tried to pass that ethic down to my dad. Unfortunately, my dad didn't pay any attention. I however, learned a lot from my grandfather, and I really appreciate all he taught me.

Excellent story. Very well written and engaging. I had no problem reading it and staying interested. Keep up the good work! :)
Lynda Schultz 04/12/08
Excellent lesson. Your opening scene reminded me of a friend who, as a pre-teen, traveled alone on a plane and had to wear one of those pouches around her neck with all the documentation necessary for an "unaccompanied child" — she hated it! Your characters were very believable.
Joanne Sher 04/12/08
Creative title, well-shown in this delightful story. Liked this very much.
Chely Roach04/12/08
A well told story, with a worthy little lesson. Great job.
Glynis Becker 04/12/08
Great lesson here and very well told. Wonderful!
Lyn Churchyard04/13/08
a very enjoyable story and a great tribute to the grandparents. Lessons taught by grandparents when a child is young can be very valuable-especially if they are taken on board.
Well done Beckie.
Marlene Austin04/13/08
This story has the taste of down-home country flavor. Loved the detail of the Grandmother's special baked deserts. yum-m-m :) Nice job, Beckie.
Debbie Wistrom04/14/08
PTL for people like Joe's grandad. Great lesson and one to be passed along like your story did.
Jan Ackerson 04/14/08
Great title, and you did a fine job with the characterization, especially of the teenager.

Here's something to think about--expand the middle section (the boy's actual visit) so that you can develop the characters of the grandparents more fully. The plane ride and the epilogue weren't really necessary, but the middle section was fascinating.

Just a thought, in case you ever decide to revisit this.
Sara Harricharan 04/16/08
Love your title! And especially the story that follows-I really enjoyed the interaction between the grandson and his grandparents. Great stuff! ^_^
Tim Pickl04/16/08
Excellently written story: I hope this propels you to Level 2 (Intermediate)!


   
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