The Official Writing Challenge
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04/10/08
How beautiful. Just a litle polish and this will shine!! Keep writing.
You paint a beautiful picture amidst a sad story here. Your gift of words shines in this piece.

You have a few typos and errors. In the third paragraph, you have "were" where it should be "where" in one place. These are minor errors though, and we all miss them sometimes when proofreading.

I really appreciate you sharing this touching tribute to your grandfather.
A very well written narrative, which would shine even more with a couple of tiny typos checked.

I particularly loved your description: "I woke some mornings with the soft sound of water outside my window, a sweet calming sound. You created such peace outside our home; it was almost like you placed each rose petal, each flower and each leaf with an artistís hand".

So very good. Well done!

04/10/08
Beautiful tribute to a grandfather who meant so much to you and gave you a host of good memories to cherish.