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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: How I Remember You
By Petru-Lee van Nieuwenhuizen
04/04/08


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How I Remember You

I woke some mornings with the soft sound of water outside my window, a sweet calming sound. You created such peace outside our home; it was almost like you placed each rose petal, each flower and each leaf with an artistís hand. I must admit I do miss the peaceful inspiration your garden gave me.

For the pain I caused you I must apologize, I never meant to hurt you. Changes came too soon, but I will never forget the look in your eyes as you looked at your great grandson. You shone over our lives with the light of a thousand angels and even now, though you are not here, your light still shines on.

I took for granted the sound of your footsteps in the garden, footsteps that were treaded deep inside our hearts without any of us knowing it. You watered every plant with care, pulled the weeds from were they grew and cut every rosebush to perfection.
How ignorant we were to how much your hard work meant to us.

How significant a day can be to the person who is unacquainted to the future and what it hold. I wish I could bring myself to keep the image of your beautiful pale grey face and the intense feeling of regret out of my mind. You looked so completely at peace; I wished I could find that same peace.

Your hair has always been a silvery white to me, I never knew you any other way. I remember your smile; I canít recall your laughter, but your smile I will never forget. It never failed to shine straight through the dark clouds and bring back the sun in the storms of our lives. You never were a man of many words, but you were strong and strict. I silently admired that in you and I still do.

I wish I could find the words to express the regret I feel for not saying goodbye, but if youíll let me I would like to do so now. You are dearly missed grandpa, I miss you dearly. The garden just is not the same without you, it beauty and grace has faded and its inspiration lost. We lost a piece of our hearts when we lost you. Please forgive me for where I have faltered and I thank you for the wisdom and grace you shared. I know you are at peace, safely in the arms of the Father.

Goodbye Grandpa, you'll always be in our hearts.


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Mandy White04/10/08
How beautiful. Just a litle polish and this will shine!! Keep writing.
Joshua Janoski04/10/08
You paint a beautiful picture amidst a sad story here. Your gift of words shines in this piece.

You have a few typos and errors. In the third paragraph, you have "were" where it should be "where" in one place. These are minor errors though, and we all miss them sometimes when proofreading.

I really appreciate you sharing this touching tribute to your grandfather.
Lyn Churchyard04/10/08
A very well written narrative, which would shine even more with a couple of tiny typos checked.

I particularly loved your description: "I woke some mornings with the soft sound of water outside my window, a sweet calming sound. You created such peace outside our home; it was almost like you placed each rose petal, each flower and each leaf with an artistís hand".

So very good. Well done!

Dee Yoder 04/10/08
Beautiful tribute to a grandfather who meant so much to you and gave you a host of good memories to cherish.