The Official Writing Challenge
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Wonderful story! My favorite part was when the grandpa was describing each of her facial features and comparing them to her family members. You have wonderful dialogue and descriptions here.

I saw a few commas that were unnecessary and should have been replaced with periods, but those are minor errors. The content of this piece is already wonderful, and with just a tiny bit of polish, it would be sparkle even more.

Thank you so much for sharing this.
What a beautiful story of encouragement!
04/10/08
You caught my heart in this story. Thanks for writing.
What a wonderful example of a grandparent's ability to uplift and encourage. I loved the line: "You’re not just some old coot, you are my old coot”.

Wonderful read; thank you for letting us have a peak at your grandfather.

What a great grandpa. Thanks for this beautiful portrait. Keep writing.
04/10/08
Wow-you're some grandpa! Your granddaughter must be very proud of you (I hope you showed her this story). Thanks for sharing a beautiful conversation with your dear loved one!
04/11/08
My favorite part is where he tells her how she's made up of the best of the family and talks about her eyes and chin and ears, etc. This has a terrific message. I want to remember this.
04/11/08
This touched me deeply. Great writing. Sweet thoughts and sentiment, and very encouraging to us grandparents that we CAN make a difference. Thanks for the gift!
04/12/08
This was beautiful. Great descriptions. It was wonderful the way he gave meaning to all of her features.
04/13/08
What a beautiful story; very well written. Great job.
You've drawn a great portrait with your MC's words. Nice job.
04/14/08
What an encouraging and uplifting piece.

Grandparents really do play a special role in the lives of their Grandchildren.

Thank you so much for sharing, I thoroughly enjoyed it.
04/14/08
Tender and sweet, and I really like the "old coot" exchange.
What a wonderful grandfather, loved his wisdom. Great job!
04/15/08
Beginner? Wow. Great job.
04/16/08
This is beautiful! A lovely exchange between grandfather and granddaughter. You dialouge was good and especially your ending that tied in with the title. ^_^
This is very good. Love the tenderness and the message, too. I predict you won't be in beginner's long.
04/16/08
Wow! Excellently written piece. I can see you going to Level 2 (Intermediate) soon!
04/18/08
Congratulations, Terry, on placing 10th in your level with this piece. Great work!
This was really good, I enjoyed it and it was a great story. here's one of mine 4 U
http://faithwriters.com/article-details.php?id=33219
Thanks 4 your comments on my 1st ever entry.I needed that. God bless