The Official Writing Challenge
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Poem flowed nicely. Great descriptions. Esp. liked the description of God - spinning, laughing, etc. Thanks for sharing this piece. :)
03/14/08
I loved this smorgasbord of thoughts and how they ran around the yard with you. :)Beautiful pictures.
What a wonderfully, delightful read. I smiled at the thought of a butterfly kissing my nose. This was so beautiful. I loved it from beginning to end, well done.
03/16/08
I absolutely loved this...especially the line,"I pick up the blooming dandelions in my yard
and I think ...perhaps I will wish on this
and blow the seeds into the heavy winds that are whipping at my hair and face..."
There is something so nostalgic there that it makes me feel like a kid again.
The entire poem makes me itch (even more) for Spring, and reminds me of the excitement of watching the gardens bloom in the warmth of summer. Ahhhh....
03/16/08
This is charming and delightful!
03/16/08
...And that Cluster of Thoughts is truly lovely! Some wonderful imagery in this piece. Welcome! I look forward to reading more of your writings!
WOW
03/16/08
I love the feel of this piece! Good job!
03/18/08
This one is so WARM--I can feel it. Your 'cluster of thoughts' translate so well into a flood of feelings. This is a well-Spring of life!
More like a cluster of beats from your heart. Very nice expression here. Good flow of energy and thought. Keep up the inspiring work.
I felt caught up in your joy. Thanks for sharing this.
03/19/08
What an artful poem. Be sure to capitalize "H" when speaking of God as the pronoun he. I don't mean to be too picky, I just find it reverent. I enjoyed the read.
03/19/08
A lovely thought cluster! I liked the part with the butterflies, those were my favorite lines! Great job! ^_^
The formatting of this piece fit the cluster of thoughts that you were conveying perfectly.

Everything flowed real smoothly. I'll admit, when I first started reading this, I wondered if it would all make sense, and it did. You transitioned well from one thought to another.

Thank you for sharing.
03/19/08
Lovely - great images.