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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: The Touch
By Coleene VanTilburg
03/12/08


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They say he does miracles. They say he can heal sickness. They say he is a great teacher; some even say he is the promised Messiah, the one to be the King. All I know is that I feel some sort of hope inside me I have never felt before. Maybe, just maybe, if I could get his attention, I could see for myself, ask him if he might heal my troubles, the hemorrhage that will not stop. I feel so weak. I do not know if I can get through the crowds. I need a plan.

Dear God in Your Heaven Most High…If this Jesus of Nazareth has your power, if he is a special angel or something, I believe. I want to be healed. I promise you God to be a devoted follower and go to Temple Mass every day. Please help me God with my faith. I know you are a God of miracles because I have been taught about you, the God of our Father Abraham. I have asked your forgiveness and given sacrifice for my anger because I am afflicted. May your mercy be on me now, Father God.

Tomorrow, I will leave early, before dawn, and hide in the city so I can have a chance to see him, to touch him. My body hurts now and I cannot keep the flies away. Will he even look at me or will the mob push me to the dirt? I can do this, yes, I can do this…I must do this; see and hear this Jesus of Nazareth.

It is time now. I wrap my head and body so that no one will see my face. I must leave now before Mother gets up to tend to today’s work. Today is the day. I must see this Jesus!

I hurry through the streets. I feel dizzy, but that is a normal feeling for me. My heart is pounding so hard in my chest. Here, yes, here is where I will wait. I am sure he will come by here with his followers. I will cry out his name as loud as I can. I am so tired. Maybe I can get a little rest before they come.

I am startled awake and I am not good; my sickness controls me. I hear the sounds. It is Him! Here He comes! Can I reach Him! Oh, there is such a big crowd. My knees feel like lose clay, giving way to the pressure of my body. I am caught in the surge. That must be Him. He is so beautiful yet I sense His strength and I am in awe. I raise my arm to reach…can I stretch? I believe…I believe you love me…I love God!

Suddenly, He turns and in a gentle voice filled with compassion he says, “Who is the one who touched me? Someone did touch me for I am aware that the power has gone out of me.”

“It is I Lord, your humble servant.”

“Daughter, he said, your faith has made you well; go in peace.”

Today, I touched my Savior. Today, my Savior touched me.


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Shelley Ledfors 03/13/08
A very beautiful illustration of the topic. I enjoyed this piece. Thanks.
Debbie Fuhry03/14/08
I enjoyed the way your story brought the woman to life for the reader. I especially liked the ending. Good job!
Marlene Austin03/14/08
Very well written account of this story. Nice job. :)
Laury Hubrich 03/15/08
Very good writing! Awesome work!
Laury
Jan Ackerson 02/23/09
Coleene, I plan to feature this lovely little story in the Front Page Showcase for the week of March 16. Look for it on the FaithWriters home page, and congratulations!
Charla Diehl 03/18/09
Congratulations on your featured story, so beautifully written. You brought life to this woman who is mentioned only briefly in the Bible. I look forward to more of your entries--and I believe your writing is beyond level 1. Great job.
Jim McWhinnie 03/25/09
Coleene, your writing, in particular, this fine article has such a wonderful "presence" about it. Your writing feels so graced by such spiritual intimacy.
Terry Askren03/29/09
A very touching interpretation of this heroic woman's struggle. You've reached back 2,000 years with perfect clarity.
Beth LaBuff 03/30/09
This is perfect for the topic. Very nicely written. Congrats on being the Frontpage Showcase Author!
Sharon Formadero03/31/09
coleen,

I must say, this is so touching... especially the last line...
I pictured the bleeding lady vividly thru your writing and felt what she would've been experiencing that time..

God bless you

-Sharon
Vivian Gordon04/01/09
What a creative piece. It really brings this story of the afflicted woman with the issue of blood home and puts the reader in her place.
Chely Roach04/05/09
The was absolutely beautiful; in concept and craft. Excellent.
Ritchil McCormack04/08/09
I appreciate the way you've personalized this passage from the bible. While I was reading through your work, I felt like I was the one touching Jesus. I like the way you choose your words carefully. To not be too flowery yet truth revealing. To God be the glory.... Keep up the good work. Keep writing for God.