The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/08
Previewing your entry before you submit will help catch difficulties like duplicating the last two paragraphs. :)
03/15/08
I've had something similar to that happen to me before--it's why I hate shopping! This made me smile.

I didn't understand why Randy kept taking a chance on meeting her at the store instead of just calling her--and some of your dialogue sounded a bit unrealistic.

But this was a cute story, and just right for the topic.
03/15/08
This was a cute story. Nice writing!
Laury
04/14/08
Why Randy?! How did you come up with that name?! That's my Dad's name! Now it makes the story weird...o well. Otherwise, very good. Keep writing! ^-^