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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: The Encasement
By Marlene Austin
03/12/08


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“Morning, honey – Joey, are you okay?”

“Yeah, I just didn’t sleep well last night. I had a lot of strange dreams.”

“Oh, I hate it when I have a nightmare!”

“Well, these weren’t exactly nightmares. The one I remember was just really – strange. That’s the only way I can describe it.”



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Joey continued to consider the disquieting dream as he drove to work.

I was on a white, sandy beach. I looked out at the ocean – the waves, the currents of water, the surf - washing over the shore just like you would expect. But, then when I stepped back and looked up, I saw a clear, cylinder-shaped object encompassing the whole body of ocean; an encasement holding all that water.

Then, I saw these people on the beach. One lady was saying, “Thank you for saving our house. It would have burned down completely if not for you.” And, I remember thinking I’m not a fireman. I work in plastic products. Why is she thanking me?

There was another group of people, and a man in a suit smiled at me and said, “We couldn’t have kept the hospital open without your help. The whole community owes you a debt of gratitude.” I was at a loss.


Arriving at the employee parking lot of the plastics firm, Joey concentrated on finding a parking space and mentally prepared for the workday ahead, pushing thoughts of this unsettling dream to the recesses of his mind.



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“Mr. Lochhead, the meeting of the quarterly report is scheduled for the Boardroom in fifteen minutes.”

“Thank you, Carla.” Joey responded, stopping by his desk before making his way to the location.


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“Well, gentlemen, there is good news to report.” Mr. Vance, the owner and CEO of the company, announced. “Our product sales are higher than they have ever been. In fact, I feel the time is right for expansion of our facilities. We are at maximum potential for our established products. What I would like to see is a visionary idea, something that no other manufacturer has on the market at this time. We will be the creative genius which will set the standard for all others.” Mr. Vance continued to motivate the group by suggesting a promotion for the person able to come up with the most innovative product.

Joey decided that he just might have the idea for which Mr. Vance was looking. He got a research team together and a prototype was designed. The outcome was a lightweight, clear, cylindrical container, which could hold a supply of clean, fresh water for use in remote areas and emergency situations. Rural communities purchased many to place in increasingly populated areas to use in case of fire until the fire departments from neighboring cities could respond. Hospitals purchased cylinders for use in emergencies where the local fresh water supply might become contaminated, as in flooding or germ warfare. Soon, nursing homes, apartment complexes, school systems, and a variety of businesses were also placing orders. Within a month, Joey was promoted to Vice-President of Research.


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That summer Joey’s wife talked with her father on the telephone, “Oh, dad, I never would have believed your pond and well would be so low. I knew it had been a dry season there, but I wasn’t aware there was such a drought. It’s too difficult for you and mom to haul water in that old pick-up of yours. How are you going to manage?”

“Uh, hon, I have a suggestion. I’m sure we can help.” Joey said reaching for the receiver.


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Sally Hanan03/13/08
You did a good job of highlighting how God can speak, and how often we can miss it entirely by not paying attention to the thoughts and dreams we have.
Jan Ackerson 03/15/08
Very interesting and thought-provoking story.

I don't think you need the asterisks to indicate "scene changes". When the action is not greatly removed from the previous paragraph by time or space, just a transisitional phrase will do, and your story will flow better.

I love the way your main character was tuned in to God.
Laury Hubrich 03/15/08
Very nice writing. It is so awesome to see how God speaks to us when we least expect it.
Laury
James Dixon03/17/08
This reminds me of a recent invention of a ceramic filter that can provide huge quantities of clean water.

I agree that it would have been better to link the sections with a sentance or phrase in some way.

You put over the message about the important of vision and dreams very well. I learnt a lot about the way God communicates with us. Thanks.
Bill Obenauer03/17/08
Very creative idea. I would love to see this as a longer story where you could develop some of your ideas a little more. Great job.
Debbie Wistrom03/18/08
What a vision you have, keep up the good words. This was intriguing and facinating.
Joshua Janoski03/19/08
I liked that your MC followed through with the idea that God gave to him.

Good job Marlene. I appreciate you sharing this.
Sara Harricharan 03/19/08
Oh this is certainly very different! I mean that in a good way-very creative! I liked how the dream tied in completely with everything else, really good and especially with your MC, I wanted to know more about Joey and everything. Great job! ^_^
Lyn Churchyard03/23/08
God moves in mysterious ways, His wonders to perform.

Good work Marlene, you've certainly captured the topic. When God gives a vision, go for it. Well done.
Celeste Ammirata03/24/08
I liked how he didn't ignore his dream when he had a chance to use the idea. And I Agree with others that God can certainly work in mysterious ways. Keep writing. God Bless


   
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