The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/08
Certainly on topic! It has the feel of a medieval fairytale. I caught the change in description of the length of hair. (shoulder length - down his back) Immediately, I realized that it had been quite awhile.
Leave an extra space between paragraphs for easier reading. The dialogue was a little 'stiff', but sometimes we imagine that kings talked that way.
Thank you for writing this.
Oh this was fun! I particularly loved "Yes, its far more gorgeous than even my wonderful face!” exclaimed Royal Ned." LOL what an egotistical twit. He should have married her when he had the chance. Great story and right on topic.
This was a fun, topical read, though a bit predictable. I'm glad she didn't marry the egotistical prince who didn't keep his promise.