The Official Writing Challenge
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03/07/08
What a wise grandmother you had!

The metaphor of a treasure hunt works well for this week. You may have mentioned it a few times too many, though--think about using synonyms, or different phrases, or inferences, so that there is greater variety in your middle section.

I'm so glad that you were able to find the treasure in this sad situation.

03/11/08
Yes.. my grandma taught me something similar and it has helped me through my life. Nice job with the story!
03/11/08
This was a very well-written and touching piece. FYI- there was one part where it seemed as if quotes from the grandmother and grandson were not separated into different paragraphs, but that's an easy miss seeing as how most of us have to reformat our stories to post them. Great job!
03/11/08
What a wise grandmother! I wondered what the earlier "treasures" were. You were a bit vague about them.
"In everything give thanks, for this is the will of God."