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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: The Sinners' Psalm
By Pamela Murphey
03/03/08


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I told another lie today
I donít know where to turn
The darkness crowds all around me
The fear inside me burns
A friend asked me to visit her
At church one Sunday morn
The amazing words I did hear
That I could be reborn
I hear Jesus was crucified
For the remission of our sins
About how Jesus bled and died
So I could be born again
How Jesus conquered death and the grave
So I could live in grace
I felt the tears running down
upon on my startled face
The altar call it finally came
My heart it danced with joy
As I leapt up from my chair
I gave my heart to the king or Kings
Now I rest safely in His care
So if the darkness surrounds your life
You feel the stress and hate the strife
There is one who will make you whole
He paid for you the ultimate cost
For Jesus you are the only goal
He came to save the lost
Jesus made a Royal Sacrifice
All that you must do is pray
A very simple prayer
All that you must do tonight
Is say Lord Jesus come into my life
I want to rest in your loving care
Ask Him today


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Laury Hubrich 03/10/08
This is a nice poem. I like this line especially, "He came to save the lost
Jesus made a Royal Sacrifice
All that you must do is pray
A very simple prayer
All that you must do tonight
Is say Lord Jesus come into my life
I want to rest in your loving care."

Good job!
Laury
Shirley McClay 03/10/08
"Now I rest safely in His care".. i like the contrast with how your MC felt at the begining.
Jan Ackerson 03/10/08
This could go on a bookmark--very nice.

You might want to tweak it a bit for rhythm and meter--try for a pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables per line. It flows better for the reader that way.

Thanks for this short and lovely poem.
Llewelyn Stevenson 03/10/08
Good, brief presentation of the gospel in testimony style. You could leave out an unnecessary word now and then for the sake of the meter, and use punctuation: it helps a staggering meter. Good work.
Marlene Austin03/10/08
Nice poem. Good job. :)
Marlene Austin03/10/08
Nice poem. Good job. :)
Glynis Becker 03/12/08
Very nicely done. I noticed one typo - 'King of Kings' not 'or'. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!