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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)

TITLE: Light From Shadows
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02/28/08


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The walls inside
Once were blue
Tears were plenty
Blessings were few

Kind words were unspoken
Love was unseen
I longed to escape
The torture so mean.

Goodness and grace
I did not know
I was resigned to live life
Alongside my foe.

As I prayed
Along with friends
They gathered like angels
To take me in.

One day he walked out
His hatred so bright
But he paused and looked back
When I shut the door tight.

Just as quickly as he took
his blackness with him
The windows were opened
to let the sun in
Life wasn’t over
It seemed brand new
I could repaint the walls
A gentler hue

With brush in hand
A new family begun
The nooks and crannies
Now painted with fun

Giggles and laughter
Hung on the walls
Color and sunlight danced down the halls

Peace and joy flourish
Safe within
A beautiful shade
Where darkness had been


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Joshua Janoski03/06/08
I interpreted this as being someone who was escaping an abusive relationship. I am not a poet, but I greatly admire those who can write good poems. Your poem rhymed well, and the message definitely fit this week's topic. Excellent job! :)
Chely Roach03/07/08
Great job...very nice.
Holly Westefeld03/08/08
You have a lot of vivid imagery here, and excellent shift of emotion.

Personally, I am inclined to prefer a tighter structure and meter, but that is just me.
Shirley McClay 03/08/08
Lots of description and emotion! I know nothing about poetry so thats all I can say! LOL
Jan Ackerson 03/10/08
"Tears were plenty/blessings were few"--what a powerful couplet!

Try to work on establishing a more regular meter, to help your poem to have a better flow.

Good job of conveying emotion.
Laury Hubrich 03/10/08
Perfectly on topic! So glad a silver lining, you had... Very good writing!
Laury
10/30/08
I think it is absolutely disgusting the way you portray yourself as an abused woman. Why do you feel the need to lie about everything in your past. Do you really need attention that badly! You were never abused, just because someone pushes you away when you attack them does not make them an abuser. You sure didn't think he was an abuser after you filed for divorce but continued to call him constantly "just to talk" after you found out he was in a relationship. Or how about how you tried to convince him to break off his relationship because the kids were just "too young". I guess that didn't apply to you! Was he abusing you when he gave you 13,000 dollars out of his retirement that wasn't even court ordered, to make sure his kids were taken care of?
11/04/08
Vallorie Francis, formerly Vallorie Boone is the author of this poem. I wonder if she removed her name because the writing is so awful. I think she may not be aware of how terrible this poem is. I think she is just embarrassed that she lies to everyone to get sympathy and attention! Well she has my sympathy, I think she is pathetic!