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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: Your Dimple
By jodie banner
02/27/08


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"I love you." I said.
I made that face,
When you asked for another drink.
The one that lets you know I'm annoyed.

"I love you." I said.
I yelled at you.
You were painting a beautiful tree,
On my living room wall.

"I love you." I said
I screamed at you.
You were helping to unload the dishwasher,
When you broke my grandmother's bowl.

"I love you." I said.
I sent you to your room.
You were playing with your baby sister,
And dropped a toy on her head.

"I love you." I said.
I spanked you.
You chased the dog into the road.
That car almost hit you.

"I love you." I said.
I hugged you.
I told you I was sorry,
We had such a bad day.

"I love you." You said.
You hugged me.
You said you were sorry,
Then you smiled and your dimple broke my heart.


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Debbie Wistrom02/28/08
WOW, what a story in such a short form. Loved your thoughts and the lesson learned. Keep up the good words.
Brigitte Hidalgo02/29/08
I remember those "bad" days. I long for them now that my kids are 15 and 18. This was a sweet illustration of the proverb. I like that the mom apologized, forgave herself, and would start fresh the next day... Good story!
Catrina Bradley 03/03/08
Oh oh oh, I love this! The last line brought tears to my eyes. Just beautiful.
Lynda Schultz 03/03/08
Sweet, and that last line is a "two kleenex" one. Nice job.
Lyn Churchyard03/03/08
Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. So short, yet so much conveyed. I so love the last line!!!
LauraLee Shaw03/04/08
Ah, what a mover and shaker of emotions. Simply beautiful.
Marlene Austin03/04/08
Nice poetic form. Good examples of the many ways a parent says, "I love you."
Karen Wilber 03/05/08
Oh, I can relate! You succinctly captured the day of a mom with a small child. Nice work! It's a keeper.
Joanne Sher 03/05/08
Delightful - and convicting to us mothers. Love the title too.
Holly Westefeld03/05/08
Jodie, I'm fresh out of red ink. Sorry. Not.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/05/08
I remember those days. You captured them perfectly in this excellent poem.
Joshua Janoski03/05/08
You conveyed so much in so few words. The ending was perfect. One of my favorites in Beginners this week. I appreciate you sharing this.
Loren T. Lowery03/05/08
Sweet and eloquent - what more could a reader want?
Super job!
Tim Pickl03/05/08
I can almost hear the child saying, "Show me you love me, mommy!" And then turns around and shows her, unconditionally. This one reads like a song!
Glynis Becker 03/05/08
Ouch! I can totally relate to this...beautifully done.
Sara Harricharan 03/05/08
Beautiful! I felt sad for seeing the repeating "I love you" and then the 'consequence' that followed. I loved the ending and glad that it turned out right. Nice job! ^_^ (and cute title!)
Hanne Moon 03/05/08
I remember those kinds of days so well. Even now after they're grown and gone, the guilt will come back. Wonderfully written, and heart breaking. Great job!