The Official Writing Challenge
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03/03/08
Really nice imagery in this poem. You brought the truth of Eve's one little action, that affected the whole of humanity, in your entry. I like the image of her just wanting to "see" what it would be like to in charge. What a tiny temptation, with eternal consequences!
03/04/08
Good job bringing this story to life!

If you will visit the message boards on "hinting day" (Mondays), you will get a lot more people to read your entries and comment on them. It would be great to have more people enjoy your work. :)
Very nice poem. I didn't quite see the topic in this one, but I might just be overlooking it. Regardless, it is a great piece of writing, and I appreciate you sharing it.
A great way to tell about the fall of mankind. Very well done indeed. A couple of awkward spots that could easily be fixed by removing one word in a couple of verses. Other than that... wonderful!
03/05/08
Great representation of Eve's point of view.