The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/08
Very cute and funny. Maybe you could have added the treadmill overhearing the person talking to someone else about how they intended to start using it again, to get back with the weight loss program. Then it would have illustrated the topic a bit more. But I still saw it.
02/28/08
Interesting slant on the topic. Cute personification of the tredmill.
03/02/08
Hi I like your story. Great work. Interesting slant. Keep writing.
03/02/08
very creative...unfortunately I have a treadmill that says the same thing from time to time! Keep developing that creativity!
03/03/08
Clever and funny. A few small punctuation errors. Keep writing.
03/03/08
Wonderful play on words! I loved this!
03/03/08
SO clever and fun! I'll bet this was a blast to write. Keep writing!
03/04/08
VERY creative. You did a good job of building up the clues to the conclusion. A bit too convicting, however. :)
03/04/08
I like the creative wording. It's nice to see a fun topic like this. I laughed several times while reading it. Keep up the clever writing.