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02/28/08
This is very tenderly written. It brought tears to my eyes. I'm sure many will relate to this. Thank you so much for sharing!
Laury
Good character interactions depicted here. You had a lot of words left in the word count, could use some of those to build a deeper description of each of these characters. :)
03/03/08
A powerful, emotional story. I would have liked to have seen more development of the characters here. Keep writing.
03/04/08
Thank you for the cleansing tears. Very moving story.
Wow. Even though you used only a few words, the emotion was definitely there. Sometimes we just need someone to be there for us and let us know that we are loved, despite our past problems and insecurities. Thank you for sharing.
You have told this superbly. Starting out almost as a casual conversation then building to the terrible revelation. What a beautiful story of love. Well done!
I agree with the others, good job and would have liked more words. Keep it up.
03/05/08
Powerful and tender - and the perfect title. Thank you for being so transparent.
You created a very emotional story with a perfect ending.
03/05/08
You nailed the topic, what a wonderful ending. How the power of sincere touch can bring such hope, especially after a cruel act like the one described.
This is good....showing the actions of love and the emotion that victims go through when they carry this burden alone for so long. Well done.
03/06/08
So, sad, but so glad that she had someone who cared that much for her. This was short, but well written. I liked the opening with the descriptions of 'black and white' that made this real. Nice writing! ^_^