The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice entry. Glad your MC came to understand her mother's true intent. Be sure to keep verb tenses consistent, i.e."she had finally acted instead of just talking", should be, "instead of just talked." :)
this is a nice story. With a bit of polish, it would be a great piece.
03/01/08
Nicely done.
03/04/08
This is a PRECIOUS story. Just love it. Your title already packs a lotta punch, and then the authenticity of the rest of the story brings it home.

Would be good to check for repeated words and maybe use a thesaurus for variety. One example is "fall" and "falling."

I especially love your MC's name. ;) GREAT job writing this. :)
I really enjoyed this. You had some great descriptions that helped me picture the MC and her situation. Keep up the great writing!