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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Actions Speak Louder than Words" (without using the actual phrase). (02/21/08)

TITLE: Hypocrite
By Christabelle Allestad


Oh Lord, she’s looking at me. I wish she wouldn’t. Now she’s coming over. Doesn’t she know she’s not welcome? But how can I be nice about it…

“Hi, Jenna!”

“Hi, Izzi.”

“You wanna hang out?”

“Umm…I gotta bunch of stuff to do. It’s not going to work.”



Lord, don’t give me that twinge of guilt. I know she looks sad, but someone else can befriend her. You know what the people at school say. She’s from a bad school. Look at the way she’s dressed. I wouldn’t be caught dead in spaghetti straps and cut-offs. And look! She’s showing her belly! I know she wants to be friends…I know that you say to reach out. But I can’t. I have a reputation to keep. Stop whispering to me! I’m not sure I want to listen.

“Hey. Jenna!”

“Hi, Alice.”

“What was Izzi doing over here? You two aren’t like friends or anything, are you?”

“No! Of course not!”

“Oh, okay, you guys just looked, like, you were talking or something.”

“No, Alice, she just wanted to…um…hang out or something. I told her I was busy.”

“Oh! I, like, totally gottcha! You wanna hang at the mall today?”

“Um…I’m kinda busy…”

“Not too busy for the mall!”

“Actually, I got homework and…stuff.”

“Oh come on! It’ll only be for a little bit!”



“I have to check with my mom…”

“YES! I’ll be over right after I drop off my stuff!”

“All right.”

“See you soon!”

Lord! I know I told Izzi I was busy, but, I really want to hang out with Alice…at the mall. I know, I know. Love my neighbor? Yeah, that’s all fine and dandy, but Izzi has other friends. Tell you who? Well, I’m sure her family likes her…no, I can’t think of anyone. Would You stop with the guilt trip already! I don’t want to be a witness! I want to live my life! But it’s Yours? I’m home, we’ll continue this later, Lord.

All right, Lord! I’m excited! It’s Sunday afternoon and we are handing out tracts. Gonna tell people the Good News! Oh look!

“Hi, Izzi!”

“Hi, Jenna.”

“Do you want to hear about Jesus?”

“I dunno.”

“He’s great! Changed my life!”


“Izzi, what‘s the matter?”

“I saw you with Alice, Friday.”


“And, if you don‘t want to hang out with me, you don‘t have to make up any lame excuses!”

“I, uh…”

“Hey, my ride’s leaving, I gotta go.”

“Okay, sure…you want a tract?”

Mutters, “Christians…”

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Beckie Stewart02/28/08
Ouch! It is true though. We are being watched and if they don't see anything different about our actions, then why listen to our words.
Kristina LeCroy02/28/08
so very true, yet so few of us live the truth. great idea!
Arlene Showalter 02/28/08
kudos. Great writing. Great topic.
Lynda Schultz 02/28/08
Yes, "ouch!" is the right word. Well done.
Seema Bagai 03/02/08
A good story for teens. Keep writing.
Dee Yoder 03/04/08
Never fails-when we make an excuse and even lie, the Lord allows us to get caught! Good story and characters. Enjoyed the dialogue, too.
Joshua Janoski03/04/08
As Christians, we should hold ourselves to a higher standard than the rest of the world. After all, we are there to reach them and help lead them to Christ. Very good story. Thank you for sharing!