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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Don't Cut off Your Nose to Spite Your Face" (without using the actual phrase or litera (02/14/08)

TITLE: Glow
By Skittles .
02/20/08


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There was once a small nation of people in a far way land that was ruled by a very weak ruler whose name was Sir Majesty DragonBreath. Now Majesty DragonBreath had only one child, a daughter whom he called ‘SnittserMouth’. However, her real name was ‘RibbonPink.’ RibbonPink absolutely adored birds, she kept thousands in her room, among which were her all time favorites. These favorites were the woodpecker, blue jay, seagull, pelican, and the parrot. But she really loved her male bald eagle the best. His name was Glow Ghat Glinds.

She called him Glow for short.

Now she and Glow went out on raining days as often as possible. Although she was terrified of his blinking gold eyes she loved to kiss his large and often bloody beak. RibbonPink sent Glow out on hunting expeditions to scare the life out of nasty skunks or robbing raccoons or sometimes speaking squirrels, and still there were sometimes that she sent him out after big butterflies. But one day, her horridly precious bird came back with a terrible injury. Blood was splashed all over his foot and was dripping to the ground.

One of his toenails had come off!

RibbonPink screamed like a sizzling barbequed hotdog and jumped on her horse. Wrapping her bird in her best shawl, she galloped as fast as lightening back in the direction of the stronghold. When she got home she stormed into the bird doctor’s office.

“Bird Doctor! Bird Doctor! Glow has a terrible wound and is going to die!” she wailed, tossing the animal to the bird man.

The man fixed Glow up and the beast was good as new by the next day. But RibbonPink was convinced that the man was lying and had his head chopped off.

Other people tried to convince her that her bird was fine and that he wanted to go out and fly with her once more. RibbonPink yelled at them, saying that she was never going to fly her bird again because he was dead.

Then they all lost their heads.

With no other way to resolve the matter, Majesty DragonBreath gave the beast to RibbonPinks sister whom he called ‘CraddleBear.’ {the sad thing that ‘CraddleBear’ is really her name}

And to this day, RibbonPink still hasn’t flown Glow and claims that he died, although she has seen Craddlebear flying him.


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Jan Ackerson 02/21/08
A cute children's tale.

I'm not sure I understood why nearly every character had both a name and a nickname--perhaps too many words were spent on that. Think about using more of your alloted words on character and plot development.

This had a lot of whimsy--very colorful.
Marlene Austin02/22/08
Well written and interesting. Somewhat "dark" for a children's story. You must like the REAL Grimms Fairy Tales more than the Walt Disney ones :)
nicole wian02/22/08
This definitely kept me interested. Just curious -did the names have meaning?
Laury Hubrich 02/24/08
I really like your choice of names. Very creative. This is a very dark tale with a disturbed little girl. Keep on writing and improving your craft!
Laury
Helen Harris02/24/08
RibbonPink is a cute name and I like birds too.

"RibbonPink absolutely adored birds, she kept thousands in her room, among
which were her all time favorites. These favorites were the woodpecker, blue
jay, seagull, pelican, and the parrot. But she really loved her male bald
eagle the best. His name was Glow Ghat Glinds."

"Glow" gave creative playful expressions, went to a very dark story, but it
have a lots of colorful birds!
"RibbonPink screamed like a sizzling barbequed hotdog"

RibbonPink loses a little adoration for her bird here in tossing him?
“Bird Doctor! Bird Doctor! Glow has a terrible wound and is going to die!”
she wailed, tossing the animal to the bird man.

Enjoy your gift and Keep in the Writing Lane. : )
God bless, Helen
I too, Learn from all your Comments. Thank you.
Joshua Janoski02/25/08
Very interesting story. I didn't understand why the little girl refused to believe her bird was alive even though she could clearly see that he was.

The names you gave the characters were clever and funny. Thanks for sharing.
Jacquelyn Horne02/27/08
Different. Seems like a child's fantasy story. With a little dialogue this would really be a great scifi.
Lauren Page03/01/08
"Sir Dragon Breath"?, "RibbonPink"?, ??????????? What were u on when u were writing this???????? lol ^-^