The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
I wish there wasn't so much complaining in churches...we need to declare a maratorium on it.

It's best to avoid exclamation points in the narrative of your piece...and "everyday" as all one word means "common, ordinary". You wanted "every day".

Good job on this week's proverb.
02/21/08
Whoops, I meant "moratorium".
02/21/08
Aren't we all too critical of others from time to time?
Good use of dialogue.
It was a little preachy near the end, but a good message.
Keep writing.
02/22/08
Great message and an all too common occurence in the church. Great writing - keep up the good work! God bless :)
Nice job. Enjoyed reading your piece. :)
I really enjoyed this story. It was well written with a good mix of dialogue and descriptions to keep me interested.

I liked the message you were conveying, and it was right on topic. Thank you for sharing.