The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
What a perfect way to illustrate the topic! I never would have thought of an eating disorder, but it fits really well.

There's a lot of narrating here--work on ways to help your reader to get inside this environment--show us the sights, sounds, smells, feelings...add dialogue to develop your characters.

Great, punchy title.
Great take on the topic.
To me, it seemed that her enlightenment was somewhat sudden, but who can say, when the power of prayer is at work.
02/22/08
Very touching story. I had similar struggles like this in high school and related to your MC's emotions. Isn't the Lord's healing touch powerful! Thanks for sharing! Keep up the great writing. God bless :)
02/23/08
Good story. One suggestion would be to use quotation marks or italics for the characters' thoughts. Keep writing.
A very powerful way to illustrate the topic. I really appreciate you sharing this. Keep up the great writing!
02/24/08
I loved this story! I can relate, as can many. Thank you so much for writing this!
02/25/08
HI: I think when we read a story we need to experience the work from the writer's prospective.
Excellent job of writing about this horrible plague that deceives the minds of our young girls.
Considering the word limits etc.. I got well into your story, could understand Messy's trying to fit in, could relate to the sadness of both her and parents, felt the helplessness of parents, their seeking help --of course through prayer - their hope - Like the whisper part, still small voice. and Missy wanting to focus on the whisper.
Excellent work keep writing.
Great story. Very thought provoking. But, it might read a little better if it was told as an insider, say the the girls voice, or her parents voice.

Well done. Keep writing.
Congratulations, Tracy.
Thank God for loving parents who believe in the power of prayer. Very well written, love the thought processes of the MC. Congtratulations on your 3rd place win Tracy! No longer a Beginner. Well done!