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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Don't Cut off Your Nose to Spite Your Face" (without using the actual phrase or litera (02/14/08)

TITLE: Don't burn a bridge
By Clarence (Sonny) White
02/16/08


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It seems God spoke to me today
About letting pride get in the way
To quick to judge and sometimes hate
And Heaven forbid: retaliate

Sometimes we let emotions guide
And common sense they over-ride
Words are said out of hurt and spite
Then later impossible to make things right

We've hurt ourselves beyond repair
Now hard to tell a friend we care
We suffer from self inflicted wounds
To much said and spoken too soon

Overcome with shame we hang our head
Much too late, the words already said
Sorrow causing pain like a heart attack
Yet thereís never a way to take them back

So letís be careful, what we say
Try not to let pride get in the way
In everything we say and do
Remember other folks have feelings too

Perhaps, leave these thoughts in our head
Itís better sometimes leaving words unsaid
Better not to burn a bridge my friend
We may need to pass this way again


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Lynn Jacky02/21/08
I really enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for sharing you are an inspiriation. Great writing keep up the good work.
Jan Ackerson 02/21/08
Very good advice!

A few hiccups in the meter of this piece...and I'd suggest that you experiment with a different rhyme scheme: perhaps ABAB, which is less "predictable" for your readers. Something to think about...

I really like your last stanza.
Holly Westefeld02/21/08
I like your title and message.
The challenge to honing rhyming poetry is meter. While there are many different patterns of meter, one important thing within a given poem is consistency, not just of the number of syllables in the lines, but of the pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables. I've even been known to resort to a thesaurus when the right number of syllable word would not come to mind.
Yvonne Blake 02/22/08
A poem!
What a great message it holds.
This should be "Too quick to judge." hopefully it was just a typo.
I loved your thoughts and choice of words.
Great writing.
Joshua Janoski02/23/08
Good poem with a good message. I am no expert on poems, so I won't try to critique this one, but I did enjoy the message a lot.
Marlene Austin02/25/08
Nice piece. Good advice. :)
Beth LaBuff 02/26/08
Great work on this! Your beginning just flows. I love this, "It seems God spoke to me today About letting pride get in the way To quick to judge and sometimes hate And Heaven forbid: retaliate. Sometimes we let emotions guide And common sense they over-ride." Your ending is a great lesson (the one promised with your title). Keep writing!!
LauraLee Shaw02/26/08
Great job! I was tapping my toe to the lesson!
Sara Harricharan 02/27/08
Very nice! Your title is great and I loved the tie in with the last two lines of the last verse. Nice work! ^_^
Beckie Stewart02/27/08
Great poem and oh so true. I love poetry and admire those who can write it. I love this.
Jacquelyn Horne02/27/08
Very good advice in poetic form.
william price02/27/08
Great effort, enjoyed your message and poem. Keep up the good work. God bless.