The Official Writing Challenge
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02/16/08
(smile) Haven't we all been in a situation where we had to use canned food?
Even though you wanted to apply a Biblical message to your story, it took away from the flow. Your message was clear without it. A verse quoted at the beginning or end is sufficient.
good writing.
Nice description and dialogue. :)