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02/14/08
Oh, the joys of buying that first car! Good character development. I could see the salesman, father, and teenage son.
Good writing.
02/17/08
Great story and great writing! Thanks for sharing. God bless :)
Nice job building your characters. Good writing. :)
02/19/08
God was good to the son with this lesson. I'm thankful he didn't buy the car only to have it fall apart. Good story.
Dialog rang true and the pace was good. Good job with this father and son, keep up the good words.
02/20/08
Very nice, Amy! He could have had to learn that lesson the hard way...
02/20/08
Quite a deal there! I'm glad that he didn't get the car and then have to deal with all the car trouble. this was great with the ending though. I liked how he was able to 'grow up' a bit and see more how none of the cars were right for 'him'. Nice job. ^_^
Great lesson learned in this well told littel story, and no crying over spilt milk.
I liked this story. Fun characters and dialogue. I'm glad that they didn't get ripped off by the car dealership. Keep up the good writing!