The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/08
I enjoyed your story. It was truly original. However, I'm not sure where the spilt milk fits in.
02/14/08
This is a good story. I enjoyed it. There are some spelling errors, though. Try to get someone to proof for you to catch those:) This reminds me of an Aesop Fairy Tale. In the future, work hard to stay on topic so you will do well in the challenge. Keep on writing!
Laury
02/19/08
Nice storytelling. The grammar mistakes distracted me a bit. I also don't see the stories relation to the topic, but it was still a very enjoyable read.

If this story got a little bit of refining just like the gold, then it would really shine. :)
02/20/08
Really nice writing style, but I also had difficulty fitting the story to this week's topic. :)