The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed your story. It was truly original. However, I'm not sure where the spilt milk fits in.
02/14/08
This is a good story. I enjoyed it. There are some spelling errors, though. Try to get someone to proof for you to catch those:) This reminds me of an Aesop Fairy Tale. In the future, work hard to stay on topic so you will do well in the challenge. Keep on writing!
Laury
Nice storytelling. The grammar mistakes distracted me a bit. I also don't see the stories relation to the topic, but it was still a very enjoyable read.

If this story got a little bit of refining just like the gold, then it would really shine. :)
Really nice writing style, but I also had difficulty fitting the story to this week's topic. :)