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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "A Man is Known by the Company He Keeps" (without using the actual phrase). (01/31/08)

TITLE: A Special Day
By Ebony Broussard
02/06/08


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“How ‘bout her, man?”

“Naw.”

“How ‘bout them?”

“Naw, man. Just chill. It’s just like fishin’. You’ll know when you got a bite.”

Ty was hot, leaning against the concrete wall, trying to look inconspicuous. Before he knew it, it was time to move. WAP! Ty felt instant sorrow and regret as he watched the red growing on the asphalt. Today is a special day, they had told him. He was going to become a man. But as he watched the horror in the eyes of the man and woman, he knew there would be nothing special about this day.

“Run, man! Run! What’chu standin’ there fo?”

Derek was halfway down the street yelling over his shoulder to him. He had frozen but the screams of the woman reminded him it was time to go. He followed Derek’s path, remembering the meeting place they had discussed earlier in the day. His footsteps seemed extra loud against the pavement. His mind was racing. Everything had happened so fast. It seemed like they had been looking for hours then it was over.

Red drops painted the front of his sweatshirt. He’d hit him. He was certain of that. Just as he rounded a corner, he saw a black and white car in front of a house. He doubled back and hid. Lights were flashing and people were gathered around outside. His chest heaved as he sought to catch his breath. Then the ambulance came.

‘What’s going on?’ he thought. The vibration from his phone drew his attention. Snapping the flip open, he read the message. IT’S TIME! What in the world! He had to go! Slipping off the sweatshirt, he folded down the collar of the button up shirt he was wearing underneath. He tucked the shirt into his khakis, pulled up his pants and tightened his belt.

His heart was still beating fast as he dropped the sweatshirt into a nearby restaurant dumpster. He had several blocks to go but he was not going to run. He walked briskly as several police cars with lights flashing flew by him. ‘Only a few more blocks. Derek is just gonna have to wait.’

Ty walked right in just like they’d planned it. Perhaps his special day was truly going to be special. He smiled to himself as he exited the elevator.

“May I help you?” a wide-eyed nurse asked as he approached the nurses’ station.

“Yes, I’m looking for Miracle Hadison.”

“Yes, just a minute.”

He fidgeted a second, rubbing his hands down the front of his pants. It was then that he noticed the spots.

“Room 304.”

“Thanks.”

He headed down the hall. As he neared the door, the message in his phone flashed back in his mind. IT’S TIME! It was time. He opened the door.

“Ty!” Miracle shrieked. The nurse smiled and said, “It’s time to push. Wait here with her. I’m going to get the doctor.”

Ty walked over to Miracle’s bedside. All she could manage before the next contraction was, “Hold my hand, please.” Then she grunted.

Just then the door opened and the nurse entered. “Sir, I’m going to have to ask you to step out of the room while we prep her for delivery.”

“Can’t I stay? I don’t want to miss anything.”

“It’s okay. We’ll let you back in for the delivery.”

Ty turned to Miracle. “I’ll be back, baby. Stay strong.”

Miracle nodded as he bent and kissed her sweaty forehead.

Ty walked out of the room, hoping it wouldn’t be too long before he could be by Miracle’s side, when he felt himself being knocked to the floor. A flurry of voices sounded loudly.

“Hands behind your back! Hands behind your back!”

He didn’t resist. When the voices finally quieted, he heard a baby’s cry from inside the room.

He knew they had Derek and he knew this would be the end of his special day.

Ty Turner and Derek Miller were apprehended separately following an assault and robbery. Miller, having an extensive criminal history, was arrested trying to pawn jewelry at a local Pawn Shop. Turner, a straight A student and college-bound senior, had raced to Mathis Community Hospital for the birth of his son where he was arrested. Both young men were from the same south side community. They will be facing multiple charges including first degree battery and robbery. In other news…


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Laury Hubrich 02/09/08
This was very well written. Good job. I like how you had the scenes coincide -- the birth of his son and his arrest. Sad but good writing.
Laury