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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "A Man is Known by the Company He Keeps" (without using the actual phrase). (01/31/08)

TITLE: Michael Maloney's One Great Moment, A Childrens Story
By jodie banner
02/06/08


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Michael Maloney's One Great Moment

Many, many minutes ago, on a monstrous mountain of mud, Michael Maloney faced a moment ,that mattered more than he knew.

The rain fell like a raging river. The mud was washing away.

The Middlin Mutters were ready to march, at the foot of the monstrous mud mound.

The Master Mutters were gathered together at the top of the ill-fated mountain, trying to save the Miniscule Mutters stuck in the mountains middle.

Michael Maloney stood on a mound, about the muds mid-mile. Smaller in size than the other Middlins, he'd managed to fall far behind.

His friends called out, "Move faster Maloney, the river is rising fast."

Michael looked up to check if the Masters were leading the Miniscules down.

He heard the Masters talk of the fate of the Miniscule Mutters inside. It seems the mud had blocked the way and the Masters were now much to large, to reach the lever to lower the bridge the Miniscules needed to cross.

Mutter tradition had always said; "Middlin Mutters ,due to inferior size, were unable to handle a Mutter Matter.", so the Middlins marched away.

Maloney was torn by the decision before him, for the Miniscules cries could be heard. Even though tradition strictly forbid it, he turned and climbed back up the mountain.

The Masters were shocked when Michael arrived and squiggled into the muds middle.

The Miniscules cheered as they crossed the bridge that Michael Maloney had mastered.

All of the Mutters were saved that day, the Miniscules, Middlins, and Masters.

But what became of Michael Maloney, who was small even for a Middlin?

From that day onward he was known as a Master and Mutter tradition was changed. No longer was size the only thing that Mutters thought to matter.


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Laury Hubrich 02/07/08
This is a very cute story. I love the alliterations! Very original but I don't think you stayed on topic. I like this, though. Very good job! I was sure rooting for little Michael Maloney! Marvelous:)
Laury
Jan Ackerson 02/10/08
Adorable! Kids love this kind of alliteration (and so do I).

I spotted several punctuation errors, and a "to" that should be a "too."

Polish this one up--it's definitely a gem!
Holly Westefeld02/11/08
I muddled the M's a bit, but this was a great story about courage, and not allowing oneself to be pigeon-holed.
Loren T. Lowery02/11/08
My oh my, such artful use of aliteration. Mindfully meaningful to all the muddely now no longer misinformed.
Shelley Ledfors 02/11/08
Very cute! I don't quite see the tie-in to the topic, but enjoyed the story.
Sara Harricharan 02/13/08
Oooh, so cute here! You kept me wrapped up here, though in a few places, I had to slow down to keep the Mutters and everything straight. The name of your MC though, is absolutely delightful, I bet kids will love this! ^_^
Marlene Austin02/13/08
Great story. Children will love this. Illustrations might help them keep all the Mutters separated. :)
Lyn Churchyard02/14/08
This almost poetic. I'd love to see this illustrated with vibrant colorful characters and lots of ooey gooey mud. Thoroughly enjoyed the read.