The Official Writing Challenge
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02/07/08
This is a very cute story. I love the alliterations! Very original but I don't think you stayed on topic. I like this, though. Very good job! I was sure rooting for little Michael Maloney! Marvelous:)
Laury
02/10/08
Adorable! Kids love this kind of alliteration (and so do I).

I spotted several punctuation errors, and a "to" that should be a "too."

Polish this one up--it's definitely a gem!
I muddled the M's a bit, but this was a great story about courage, and not allowing oneself to be pigeon-holed.
My oh my, such artful use of aliteration. Mindfully meaningful to all the muddely now no longer misinformed.
02/11/08
Very cute! I don't quite see the tie-in to the topic, but enjoyed the story.
02/13/08
Oooh, so cute here! You kept me wrapped up here, though in a few places, I had to slow down to keep the Mutters and everything straight. The name of your MC though, is absolutely delightful, I bet kids will love this! ^_^
Great story. Children will love this. Illustrations might help them keep all the Mutters separated. :)
This almost poetic. I'd love to see this illustrated with vibrant colorful characters and lots of ooey gooey mud. Thoroughly enjoyed the read.