The Official Writing Challenge
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02/07/08
Very nice children's story. You probably noticed that you spelled wisely wrong in your title? Oops... I would suggest you read your writings over and over to make sure it sounds right. There are a few sentences that could be reworked to be more effective. You have a good piece of work here. With a little bit more work, it will be even better:)
Laury
02/09/08
This is a very nice children's story! There were some typos in here, but I think you caught the essence of the topic well. Keep up the good work!
I liked Lucy and was glad the principal was so smart. Right on topic, too. The way you tied the scripture in worked well. Keep up the good words.
Very good example of running with the wrong crowd. I was a little confused at a mouse living in a human atmosphere. But, then, I'm not a child anymore. Good writing.
Wonderfully detailed description of Lucy Mouse. Good job. :)
I enjoyed this. Very sweet childrens story. Nice job.