The Official Writing Challenge
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01/31/08
Nice job with the contrast between these two men. I'm glad you ended it the way you did.

Some of your paragraphs had odd formatting, a minor distraction.

The character of the older pastor is beautifully written.
Touching story. Realistic look at "multi-pastor" families. :)
02/01/08
I love how the mother stood up for her husband! Good job! Love the ending!
Laury
Very nice story and a reminder that there are many different mission fields; some close to home and some far away. Nicely written.
Marilyn
02/07/08
Congratulations on your EC. Way to go.
Congrats! The dialoge was realistic and the characters likeable ~ good job!
02/07/08
Very good story and dialogue! Congratulations on your EC!!
Glad for the wake up call for this kid. Thanks for a wonderful story and congrats on your EC!
I think your dialogue here is excellent, especially the father. I could picture this family. Very realistic story. Great job. Congrats on your EC.
02/07/08
Great job. I'm impressed. Congrats on EC, Jason.
02/08/08
Congratulations on your EC placing with this excellent article. Looking forward to more from you.
02/08/08
Great dialogue. Good story!
02/12/08
Congrats, Jason! Very nice. :) Cat
02/13/08
Congrats on EC. This is a beautiful story with a powerful lesson for us all. You really cared for your characters and it showed in the way you drew the reader into the story.