The Official Writing Challenge
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I love the gentleness of this story.

There's a lot of "telling" here, and not as much "showing." As a writing exercise, consider doing a search on "showing, not telling" and re-working this piece.

It's a very strong story, and I'd love to see it polished up a bit. Your writing skills are very evident.
I agree with Jan. This is very well-written. It would help if you added dialogue. Make an interaction with your characters. Keep on writing. You have the gift!
Excellent portrayal of how life's crises often promote great changes. Nice job. :)