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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: DREAM CHASER
By Marita Thelander
01/29/08


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“She’s a bit plain, don’t you think?” The heavy male judge grunted as he leaned forward to see down the length of the table.

The six judges of Tomorrow’s Top Star argued and pulled for their favorite singers to make it into the final cut. Only twenty singers allowed and they still needed to cut ten contestants.

“I like her, and I think she will polish up nicely.” The head judge pushed her red half glasses up her tiny nose as she glanced at the thirty names in front of her. “Besides, doesn’t Estelle mean star? I think the whiney Country singer should go. He’s not diverse enough and his whiney-nasal sound grates like finger nails on a chalk board.”

***

Laughter rumbled through the doorway as the contestants sat in the lobby anxiously waiting for the final cut to be announced. Estelle separated herself, sitting on the floor in criss-cross style with her back against the wall. The door swung open and the judges posted the final list. The room was a buzz of activity as everyone swarmed the list to see if their name was on it.

Estelle was eager to see the list, but chose to wait for the crowd to clear. The room suddenly filled with shrieking, crying, and general hysteria. Thumbs were getting a workout as people called or texted their loved ones. Estelle scanned down the list placing her trembling index finger on the paper to help her focus on the task. Then she found it. ESTELLE COOPER, second to the last name on the list.

She let out a heavy breath, not even realizing she had been holding it. Quietly she slipped away to call Buck. “Hey…..I made it.”

Buck let a whoop like no other. Soon, Buck’s co-workers were hollering and whistling into the phone. “I knew you would make it!”

“You realize this means we have to postpone the wedding?” Estelle’s voice trembled with emotion.

“Yeah, I know. Baby, you go for it. If you don’t follow this dream, you will regret it later. You work hard at it, and see where it takes you. I’ll be right here waiting for you. I am one hundred percent supportive. You hear me?”

Estelle let out a big sigh. “I love you, Buck. I’ll call you as often as I can. Gotta go, they are calling us all together. Muwah. Love ya, bye.”

Estelle’s appearance suddenly became scrutinized. The fashion experts had a way of making her feel inferior as they started with her hair and worked their way to her toenails. Estelle stood in front of a full length mirror, pulling at her shirt, attempting to cause the article of clothing to cover more skin. Grabbing her hot lemon-honey tea, she dragged herself away from the mirror.


***

Standing in line at the grocery store, Buck snagged a copy of a magazine with Tomorrow’s Top Star's final four contestants on the cover. As he browsed through the magazine his gaze halted on a photo of Estelle. Buck had been aware of some of the changes after seeing Estelle in the early part of the show’s taping. What he saw now…..simply couldn’t be his Estelle.

Buck paced the floor of his apartment waiting for Estelle’s phone call. He needed to ask more questions. Why didn’t he dig deeper before? That night, Buck discovered that Estelle had started taking sleep aides to fall asleep faster, and drinking potent energy drinks throughout the day to stay awake. Estelle shared stories of how exhausting this lifestyle turned out to be. Being on the fast path to stardom just didn’t seem as glamorous and alluring once she found herself in the midst of it.

Buck assured Estelle that he loved her and prayed for her before they said their good-byes. Estelle’s childhood dream of being a singer had taken a toll on her.

***

“Tonight we say good-bye to Estelle Cooper and we are down to our final three.” Estelle stood next to the show’s host with a plastered smile on her face.

“I’m going home. I’m going home.” Is all she could think.

“Blah-blah-blah blabbidy-blabbidy-blab” Is all she could hear.

In a matter of days, Estelle found herself in the strong arms of Buck in the middle of a crowded airport. “Baby, are you sad you didn’t win?”

“No, I’m glad I didn’t win. All the fancy clothes and glittering lifestyle just isn’t worth being apart from you. Thank-you for letting me chase my dreams”


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Jan Ackerson 02/01/08
I loved the "Muwah!" What a sweet touch.

Gerald Shuler 02/01/08
I didn't care for the "Muwah" but I'm an unsentimental old geeser. I loved the rest of it, though.
Laury Hubrich 02/02/08
Very good storytelling! I like the interaction between the man and woman! Very good. You were right on topic! Keep on writing! Keep on improving your skills -- you have great potential!
Laury
Marlene Austin02/02/08
Good descriptions of the characters. Nice job. :)
william price02/04/08
Very good with some very creative lines. You hit the topic right on. For Red Ink, everything seemed fine, a few speed bumps, but what lacked, was some passion. It's hard to explain, but I'll try, you told a very good story, but didn't sell it. That comes with time and practice and developing a confidence in your writing voice. I was very impressed with what I read and I suspect you will be moving on up soon. You have great talent. God bless.
Catrina Bradley 02/04/08
I love this - I'm glad Estelle didn't fall for the glitter, and I especially loved her man's support as she chased a dream.

Red and Black Ink: try to avoid cliches like "The room was a buzz of activity", but the follow-up - "as everyone swarmed the list" was clever.

I can see you improving - keep working as hard as you did on this story, and you'll only get better. :) Cat
Marita Vandertogt02/04/08
You packed a lot of Estelle's process into 750 words and I think you did a great job. I loved your opening paragraphs - you have a natural easy flow to your writing that makes it enjoyable to read. Definitely keep going!!
Paula Titus 02/05/08
I echo the 'natural and easy' flow of this story - fun read :)
Dee Yoder 02/05/08
I've often wondered how "fun" it could actually be to go through that kind of emotional roller coaster, too. Good characterization!
Leigh MacKelvey02/06/08
Your characters were believable and the dialogue wasn't artificial. I see a really, really good writer!here! You will move up quickly!
Karen Wilber 02/06/08
I liked this love story with the happy ending. Liked the "blah blah..." part that was all she could hear. Nice touches throughout - the trembling finger, text messaging thumbs, Buck's concern. I could see the characters and cared for them.
Joanne Sher 02/06/08
You did an excellent job of putting us right in the middle of all Estelle was going through. I felt like I really knew what it was like for her.
Debbie Wistrom02/06/08
Perfect title for your story that hit the topic right on, glas she learned early. Keep up the good words.
Sara Harricharan 02/06/08
Ah, what a story! I'm so glad for Buck, he was great and so supportive her, amazing! Your title fit this just perfectly and I'm glad that she found the real dream she was looking for! ^_^
Holly Westefeld02/06/08
Ah, this reminds me of the agony of being prepared for dance recitals when I was little, which is probably why I resist conforming to this day.
Buck was terrific!
Loren T. Lowery 02/06/08
A dream realized twice. Once to try out the other to end up in the arms of Buck.
Nice job of story telling with a good message.
James Dixon02/07/08
"I think the whiney Country singer should go. He’s not diverse enough and his whiney-nasal sound grates like finger nails on a chalk board."

My thoughts on both kinds of music (Country & Western -Blues Brothers). This was well written and neatly turned around. There is nothing glamorous about writing of course. ;)
Llewelyn Stevenson 02/07/08
Delightful.


   
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