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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: The Clifftop Domain
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01/29/08


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The cliff top looked unattainable from the shoreline but determination was an evil task master. She would make that craggy hillside climb as if her life depended on it. The cliff had been calling her name for three days now. The sting of her scraped knees and fingertips diminished as she stood on the top of the cliff and looked down at the clear blue green water lapping at the sandy shoreline. Was this what the crystal sea would look like in heaven? If so, maybe now was not too early to vacate this life for a celestial shoreline.

She felt like royalty looking over her domain. Waving her hands over the empty expanse of air, she glanced down into the water mesmerized by how she could still see the waves moving the water back and forth across the sand. The flowers along the grass line dotted red, purple, yellow and pink like little pinpoints of color reaching up to bless her eyes.

Glancing back to the water line she saw a shining below her glittering in the water, swirling with ever move, the pattern changed constantly as if it was printing letters for her to read. But the water changed the shapes before she could even get her mind to register a letter. The color is what stood out before her. As much as she wanted to stay here, Queen of her domain, she wanted to see if her cliff top view had any merit.

Clamoring down the side of the cliff was a lot quicker than the climb, but now instead of hands and knees she had bruised her behind. Oh well, this was a trip of a lifetime her body could stand a few bruises. Reaching the sandy shoreline, she heard the cottage door open. Oh great, surely it’s not been three hours yet. She kept walking as if she had not heard when Jeff appeared at her side.

“Hey honey, Allison’s up and I need to leave. The guys have been here ten minutes already.”

Tonya kept walking she had to find that spot in the water that had so mesmerized her earlier.

“Tonya I can see you are in your do not bother me mood right now. But you’ve had your three hours of alone time and now it’s mine. The golf lines are forming as we speak. A deal is a deal, dear.”

The dear only came out when he was annoyed, and right was right. He did watch her for three hours.

“I have her sun bonnet on and her sunscreen. She’s been changed and fed. Do you want her on the beach with you or are you two going somewhere? The car keys are on the table.”

Now the tone was my way or no way. “I’ll take her here; I’m looking for something I saw on the cliff. Thank-you, dear,” the temptation to reply in kind was too much; he smiled realizing he’d been caught. Reaching down he kissed her soundly and whispered “Be good, have fun and I will be back in time for the Lau on the beach tonight.”

“Allison how’s Mommy’s little girl? Let’s look for some pretties in the water. I should be able to find the spot if I keep the cliff line in view.” Tonya tickled her fourteen month old daughter. Who like her mother could not take her eyes off the moving waves. The search lasted till Allison became bored but she could not fine the color from the cliff. Tomorrow she would climb that bloody cliff again. She was so determined to fine the shine that moved her soul.

No new skinned finger tips or skinned knees. Standing on the cliff Tonya once again viewed her domain, the color of gold beneath the clear blue of the waves moved beneath her. This time she made land marks and knew exactly how far the colors out in the water lay. Shimmering down the cliff Tonya ran to the spot. Treading thru the waves she reached for the glimmer that had spell bound her for two days, reaching into the blue she gave a tug and pulled out a handful of yellow sea weed. Long and wavy it lisped in her hand, looking down its companions moved to the beat of the waves, lisping and forming shapes that held her again.

God’s creation so amazed her from the cliff top to the shoreline. Her life with Christ was divine.


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Jan Ackerson 02/01/08
You've got some lovely descriptive passages here, and I like the playful relationship between the husband and wife.

I caught a misspelling of "luau", and I think you may have been too literal in your interpretation of the proverb.

I also like that she did not give up in her pursuit of what she had seen.
Laury Hubrich 02/02/08
I love your descriptions! I was wishing I was standing on that clifftop! Keep on writing. You have much potential!
Laury
Marlene Austin02/02/08
Great descriptive detail in this piece. Good job. :)