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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “All that Glitters is Not Gold” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: Rescued
By Evelyn Rodgers
01/28/08


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Rescued
Lori was so discouraged and down in the dumps. Her friend Sally had always been there. They did everything together and now she was moving. Life would never be the same. How was she going to survive?
Walking to school that morning she met Betsy who lived a few blocks away. They started waling to school together each day. She seemed to be a good friend and filled the hole left when Sally moved. A few weeks later Betsy invited Lore to her house for the evening. Some friends from school were going to be there as well. She was really missing Sally and this looked like such a good chance to make new friends with more kids from school. Her Mom thought it would be okay to go.
When Lori arrived at Betsy’s a number of teenagers were there already and they welcomed her. About an hour later Lore saw some of the kids bring out what looked like cigarettes but she found out it was marijuana. This was new to Lori. As she watched, they encouraged her to try one. “One can’t hurt you and it helps forget your problems, etc” one of them said.
She wanted so badly to be accepted by this group and thought that if she refused, she’d be without friends again. Slowly she took one and tried it. After inhaling for a few moments she felt her despondency lift, her fears drifted away and she had such a good time.
Over the next few weeks she tried the drug a number of times with similar results. What she hadn’t been told was that it was additive and that she’d have to have this stuff. Now all of a sudden she felt she needed this stuff each day to get her through the day. What had looked like a harmless past time now enslaved her.
Her mother began noticing changes in Lori’s attitude toward school and life at home. One day she sat Lori down and wanted to know what was going on. Because Lori and her mother had a good relationship she was able to tell her mother what was happening. What a shock this was to her parents.
The next day Lori’s mother accompanied her to the additions centre in town where she received counseling and help to quit the drugs. How fortunate she was to have a family where there was love and openness.
It took awhile for her to get back to normal. Her friends didn’t want her anymore but it didn’t take long before she had new friends in a church youth group that could have a good time without drugs or anything like it.
This had been a scary lesson for Lori but one that she wouldn’t ever forget. Not everything in life that looks so rosy is what it’s made out to be. She had been spared much heartache and tragedy because he had a good relationship at home and she listened to her parents.


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Jan Ackerson 02/01/08
A cautionary tale for teens to heed!

I noticed several spelling errors (addictive/additive and Lori/Lore among them), and the solution seemed to come much more easily than in real life.

I see this as a discussion-starter for jr. high or high school church groups.
Laury Hubrich 02/02/08
Good story. I can't imagine any teen admitting to her drug use so easily, though. Maybe you should have had some drama in there, make it more life-like! Keep on writing!
Laury
Sara Harricharan 02/05/08
This is a little hard to follow, I think it moved too fast with too much front story, if you'd added a bit of dialouge and showed a little more than 'told' it would definitely add some to this piece! The idea is great though and I really liked how you showed valid reasons for why she actually tried it. Nice job. ^_^
Marlene Austin02/05/08
Written well for young people. It really helps the reader if there is an extra space between paragraphs. :)