The Official Writing Challenge
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02/01/08
I liked reading your descriptions about the woman's life. It would be better if you had some dialogue maybe but overall you did a good job!
Laury
Good story material here - I could see it developing into a larger short story. Great descriptions about their life in a small apartment. You write well.
02/02/08
Absolutely beautiful--I love the title, the prose, and the lump-in-the-throat ending.