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Very good writing. I like your mixture of dialogue with it. Good job!
This is cool--you've written a story that shows your strongly held views, so that it didn't come across as preaching.

I'd have liked a bit more context, though--who are these men? Friends? Brothers? What are their relationships? Where are they when these conversations are happening? The conversations just seem isolated and distant to me.

Your main character is fascinating to me--good job.
This gave me goosebumps reading it, what a good look at what's really still going on in some churches today.
You had some good descriptions and Kenny was a good character, the ending was okay. Nice job. ^_^
Hi there--I tried to respond to your recent question to me, but my e-mail bounced back. Is your e-mail correct here ot FW?

Anyway, send me an e-mail at and I'll be glad to try again (re: exclamation points)