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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of ďAll that Glitters is Not GoldĒ (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: I was hoping to show off!
By lydia kasumba
01/25/08


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One minute Iím in tears over the possibility that seems to be fact as time winds on with no answer and then the next minute Iím smiling because of the realisation that even if I go that road I will not be going it alone.

The next morning Iím in shock as I meet rhapsody on my way to work.

Immediately I remember my first impression of him
Shy; not bad looking; friendly; intelligent; educated; walks with GOD? Or religious? Iím not sure but I was not convinced by his cell leadership or his praying in tongues; not a very open and easygoing guy; perhaps a bit imbalanced with all his church church and more church activities.

He had left a question mark of curiosity in my mind and yet not quite captivating my attention.

I got in first and he sat next to me
We said our hellos and I then I continued the conversation offering compliments for the New Year
Then he asked me what Iím doing Saturday

My female instincts tell me that he likes me but perhaps he doesnít know how to approach me
But I could be wrong
He may just want to evangelize me instead to get me to be the next member of his church
I donít know

I guess time will tell but the question Iím asking myself is whether or not I should bother to give him that time.

Am I starring at the man that would be my husband? Or is this another distraction?
And whatís more, what disturbs me is the fact that I like him and yet he doesnít fit what I asked God for.


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Laury Hubrich 02/01/08
I like the conversational tone to this piece. Please make sure you proofread your work. It helps if you can get someone else to do it. It's so hard to catch your own mistakes. Keep up your writing!
Laury
Jan Ackerson 02/02/08
Who knows--he may turn out to be gold after all!

Watch your use of semicolons--in most places where you have them, commas would be more correct.

I like the voice of this little piece.
Hanne Moon 02/05/08
You need to be more careful with punctuation. There were many places with no periods, and many semi-colons that should have been commas instead. I liked the subject you brought to this challenge, that of choosing a husband and looking to see what lies beneath. Keep writing!