The Official Writing Challenge
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02/01/08
I like the conversational tone to this piece. Please make sure you proofread your work. It helps if you can get someone else to do it. It's so hard to catch your own mistakes. Keep up your writing!
Laury
02/02/08
Who knows--he may turn out to be gold after all!

Watch your use of semicolons--in most places where you have them, commas would be more correct.

I like the voice of this little piece.
02/05/08
You need to be more careful with punctuation. There were many places with no periods, and many semi-colons that should have been commas instead. I liked the subject you brought to this challenge, that of choosing a husband and looking to see what lies beneath. Keep writing!