The Official Writing Challenge
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02/01/08
Very good writing. One thing you can do to help make it read more smoothly is to separate your dialogue by paragraphs. Go read some masters or advanced and see how others do it. I really liked this -- right on topic!
Laury
02/02/08
Good job of showing us the contrast of her office and her home--I like this story.
02/05/08
I'm so happy she made a decision for real happiness! I was with her all the way with wondering whether the position was worth what it was making her miss out on. Her family.
This is really good! Thanks for sharing! ^_^