The Official Writing Challenge
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02/01/08
I love your message here! It would be so much better if you capitalize at the beginning of each sentence. You have great nuggets of wisdom here, make sure you round it out by good proofreading. I always have someone proof mine before sending.

Keep on writing. You have much wisdom to share!
Laury
02/02/08
Very good advice. Can you give us some specific examples from your life, or from the life of someone that you know?

In addition to the capitalization suggestion above, you might also add one space after commas and periods. It makes your piece more "eye friendly".
02/05/08
Some very good advice in this piece, it's really backed up with truth, if you wanted to expand a bit, some of your own personal experience or a memory or something tagged into there would blend really well!

Just a tip-add spaces in between for easier reading-good job! ^_^
02/05/08
Your writing expresses very relevant truth, but I would suggest paying more attention to punctuation and capitalization rules. Challenge entries are fun, but they should be handled the same way you would a piece that you were sending off to a publication. Good thoughts! Keep writing!