The Official Writing Challenge
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While this type of story is not my particular favorite type-your telling held my attention. In my opionion that's good story-telling! It is a good illustration of the subject. Bless YOU!
01/25/08
Right on topic!
You do well, mixing dialogue with action.
The strange names sometimes slow me down, but that's part of your genre.
good job...keep writing
I liked the storytelling. It kept my attention. Also, your descriptions were very nice. I sometimes find it ahrd for me to describe battle sequences, but you did a great job.

I thought that some of the names of the characters seemed more fitting to a sci-fi story instead of a fantasy story, but that's just my opinion. Very good job!
Great story which kept to the topic.

I enjoy this particular genre, so it left me wanting more.
Well done.