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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of ďA Bird in the Hand is Worth Two in the BushĒ (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/10/08)

TITLE: E-Mails of Change
By Julie Ruspoli
01/17/08


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From: Mom_44@Mom_Again.net
Subject: Last day of work
Date: 3/12/2001

I just packed the last box. Mr. Hamilton had a fit when he saw me pick one up. He is so sweet.
The CEO sent me a letter to inform me that if I changed my mind after the baby is born to give him a call. I donít think that will happen, but I guess I donít really know what I will feel then. Ten years as Assistant to the Vice President is a long time and being a stay at home Mom will be an enormous change.
Dad is going to the doctorís appt. tomorrow for the ultrasound. We canít wait.
Love,
Mom



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From: Nurse_in_training@Future_Nurse.net
Subject: Re: Last day of work
Date: 3/13/2001

Hi Mom, sorry I didnít get back to you yesterday. I had a big test to study for. I think I passed it. The answers came easy to me this time. Yes, you were right, study, study, study.
Having a baby is a big change. You havenít done it for 18 years. Especially since you have been a Ďcareer ladyí most of your life. You know Dad and I will support you either way. Just take it one day at a time and see what happens.
Call me after your doctor appt.
Love you, Sarah


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From: Mom_44@Mom_Again.net
Subject: Wow, another baby!
Date: 6/4/2001

Hey Sweety, Just got home from the hospital.
You should have seen the taxi drivers face when I told him the baby was mine.
I still canít believe I had another child at 44. Your Dad is talking about putting his office in the house.
Mr. Hamilton called from the office to congratulate us and see if I am coming back soon.
No way am I leaving this precious girl now. I wish I wouldnít have had to with you.
Your sister wants fed, come by after school.
Love You,
Mom.



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From: Nurse_in_training@Future_Nurse.net
Subject: My Ďoldí Mom :)
Date: 6/4/2001

Hey, got a break between classes. Itís an epidemic of old Moms. A lady in my class is 43 and had a baby in January. You Ďoldí gals should know what to do this time. LOL
You werenít with me every second of my life, but I had it good. I knew you loved me and you wanted to be there even when you couldnít. You are a great Mom!
Give Natalie a kiss.
Love You, Sarah


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From: Mom_44@Mom_Again.net
Subject: Natalieís first day at school!
Date: 8/7/2006

Natalie was so cute today. She wasnít scared at all. When the teacher showed her to her desk, her little eyes got really big and she said, ďI get to sit here all the time?Ē
Oh, I was the oldest parent there. Surprise, surprise.
I canít wait to pick her up after school. One of the other mothers invited me to a support group for stay at home momís at the Church on Main Street tomorrow morning. I think Iíll go for something to do.
Stop by after work. (She has a picture for you. Itís a surprise.)
Love you,
Mom



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From: Nurse_in_training@Future_Nurse.net
Subject: Church?
Date: 8/7/2006

Iím on my lunch break.
Wow, my mom going to church. Who would have guessed?
See you later.
Love, Sarah


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From: Mom_44@Mom_Again.net
Subject: Guess What!?
Date: 12/24/2006

Dad and I went to church this morning. The church was so beautiful with pine garland, red bows and white poinsettias everywhere. When the choir sang, I felt so funny and started crying. But I wasnít upset, I was happy, and I felt so peaceful. Does that make sense? I think I saw a tear in Dadís eye too, but he turned his head.
They also had the kids sing Christmas Carols. Natalie wants to sing with them.
Natalie had a great time in Junior Church. She talked about Jesus being her friend the entire drive home.
Guess what your Dad and I did? We got saved! Not sure what all that means but they have Sunday School before morning worship to teach us about it. I feel so good inside, like a weight has been lifted off my shoulders. Come over later so I can tell you more.
Love you so much,
Mom



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From: Nurse_in_training@Future_Nurse.net
Subject: Peaceful feeling!
Date: 2/14/2007

I will be over soon to talk.
Went to the Bible study you suggested.

I GOT SAVED!

Love, Sarah





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James Dixon01/17/08
Hi,
What an interesting form to present a story.

Regards
James@comments.fw.web
Yvonne Blake 01/18/08
What a unique format!
It told so much with so few words.
Great writing.
LauraLee Shaw01/22/08
This is really great! I like the way you put one email in italics and the other in regular font. That made it easy to follow. Great creativity here....
Hanne Moon 01/22/08
Interesting format...this was very creative! This was very easy to read as well. I liked it!
Jan Ackerson 01/22/08
Very cute, original idea. I love the relationship between the mom and both her daughters.

Not sure how it fits with the proverb?

Cool how they both had the same great news at the end.
Karen Wilber 01/22/08
Like the format too and that you managed to get a lot of story into the emails. You don't even want to know how old this new mom is. ;-D LOL

I didn't quite get the proverb tie in either. I think there's a new message strand on the boards if you want to fill us in.
Joy Faire Stewart01/22/08
Love the way the e-mails told the story of this loving family.
Catrina Bradley 01/22/08
Very creative, very touching. This story within emails made me tear up. I'm not really seeing the proverb, but I love your article.
LauraLee Shaw01/22/08
I just re-read this entry. I can see how the mother is giving up the "two birds in the hand" of keeping her job with all the perks of retirement to care for her "baby bird in the hand." That must have been a difficult decision, because she lost all of that security. It does illustrate one aspect of the topic if you see the first email carefully.
Dee Yoder 01/23/08
Lovely story, Julie. I read your explanation in the thread, and I see your message. Your characters are nicely developed-I can almost see them exchanging their heartfelt emails. I love the ending!
Holly Westefeld01/23/08
Very enjoyable.
I do like subtle, and even noticed the topic in the first message, but had completely forgotten it as I was caught up in the rest of the story.
Beth LaBuff 01/23/08
I really liked how your story progressed with the emails. Your title is good. I enjoyed your creativity on this.