The Official Writing Challenge
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01/22/08
This story has great possibilities with a little tweaking and some 'white space' for us geezers who are a bit cross-eyed! :0) I agree, the topic is somewhat obscure, but the heart of the mother is very well presented. Looking forward to reading more of your submissions~
01/22/08
So sad!
You described the setting and the thoughts well. I would have enjoyed a little more description of brought them to this point.
Good job...keep writing.